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Post by wolflover86 on May 17, 2008 19:24:56 GMT 10
He Is Called:Mohawk
He Is: 5 months old
What Is He Like: His playfulness usually gets him into trouble with other wolves. He Looks Like: He is a black pup with a white in between his ears.
Sample Post: The young wolf pup scampered across the field yelping joyously, he had gotten away from the pack without them noticing and he could now explore the forest that he had been warned to stay out. He leapted over a log and kept going, nothing could stop him now.
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HalfMoon
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Post by HalfMoon on May 19, 2008 18:35:01 GMT 10
You need at least three lines of Description and Personality.
Try putting how mischievous he is, or what he likes. For description try putting in build (big or small) and be extravagant with your words. Since he is just a puppy you could also put how playful he is.
Also, you need to put in a history for your first charry which needs to be four lines.
It's not a must, but it would be easier on the eyes if there were breaks between the sections (name, personality, etc)
You're sample post is good, but I can't accept it until you fix these little things.
If you need any inspiration you can browse a bit through the other accepted characters.
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Post by wolflover86 on May 21, 2008 0:25:58 GMT 10
His playfulness usally gets him in trouble,for he likes to trick other wolves and he is obstinite when it comes to obeying, he is not evil just a bit of a brat. He was born in a small undergrowth to his mother and 3 siblings. When they grew older, she had started to move them but they were attacked now he is on his own.
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HalfMoon
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Post by HalfMoon on May 21, 2008 17:34:02 GMT 10
That was mostly personality, which makes personality a pass.
You need more in What looks like. At least 3 lines[/b].
And you need more lines for History. At least 4 lines[/b].
You need to put it in the original post
so that when other look at it they don't have to scroll down to read about him.
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