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Phantom
Jul 15, 2008 12:41:11 GMT 10
Post by phantom on Jul 15, 2008 12:41:11 GMT 10
Name:Phantom ;D
Breed:Timber wolf
Age:One year
GenderFemale
DescriptionDarkish brown fur with a few streaks of black and red.Paws are black.Greenish yellow eyes.Slightly smaller then the average wolf.
PersonalityPhantom is a kind wolf, but is easily frightened off.She is slightly 'talkative' once she gets comfortable.Very loyal, if someone were to tell her a secret,she'd rather die then tell anyone else.
HistoryWas always a tad frightened when she was a pup,her larger brothers and sisters would always pick one her until an adult came to her rescue.Eventually she started to wander away from the pack or stay aways away from the pack.She almost always ate last, except when she caught her own food.When she was old enough to survive on her own Phantom decided to leave to look for a pack that would welcome her for who she was.
Sample Post Phantom jumped down from the ledge ungracefully.She sighed as she tripped, then picked herself up.Why am I always so clumsy?she asked herself, headed to the stream to drink.She didn't like the way the owl in the near by tree eyed her so she gave a soft bark, hoping to scare it away.The owl hooted and flew off.Phantom bent down to drink, and her tongue quickly darted in and out of her mouth, thirstily lapping up the water.
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HalfMoon
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Phantom
Jul 15, 2008 17:25:40 GMT 10
Post by HalfMoon on Jul 15, 2008 17:25:40 GMT 10
You need more for description.
Also, there are a fair few spelling mistakes and errors in grammar (spaces after full stops and punctuation). You can use the inbuilt spell check; I'll be the first to admit I'm not the greatest with spelling, and without Firefox I'd be lost ^_^ As for grammar, it's not too important, just keep an eye on it.
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Phantom
Jul 23, 2008 5:06:21 GMT 10
Post by phantom on Jul 23, 2008 5:06:21 GMT 10
Um..What else does it need?(Sorry it took me so long to reply)
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HalfMoon
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Phantom
Jul 25, 2008 12:39:06 GMT 10
Post by HalfMoon on Jul 25, 2008 12:39:06 GMT 10
Description, more in the appearance part of your bio.
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